Red Writing Hood: The Solo Roadtrip

November 18, 2011

Creative, Memes, Red Writing Hood, Travel

The Solo Roadtrip. The roadtrip you take after you’ve procrastinated as long as possible because you’re not actually sure that you want to spend 5 hours in a small car with, well, yourself.

After three Frappuccinos and hastily packing clothes, I’m on my way — hair pragmatically yet attractively clipped away from my face. (It’s requisite to look good while on a Solo Roadtrip. Heaven forbid total strangers see you and know by your appearance that you couldn’t find anyone to go with you.)

I leave The City behind and find myself in a strangely good mood. I’m on 280 South and am struck by the beauty of rolling foothills covered in grasses and studded here and there with copses of oak trees that from far away look like green giants huddled over in abdominal pain. The brown hills aren’t brown — this morning they are gold and amber every other attractive variant of brown that my mind can grasp. The rare green patches of grasses put me in mind of a Disney movie — Bambi perhaps (before the forest fire, of course).

I begin to feel a driving need to be productive. Even though I’m trapped in a car for 5 hours, I am desperately searching for a way to Get Things Done. And oh! There’s so much to do. I mentally clean my house…

And geez… I’m feeling very creative.  I should be getting studio time and recording music…  if I only had a tape recorder I could write songs in the car…

And then I realize that three Frappuccinos was an unwise move.

Let me tell you, DUIF (driving under the influence of Frappuccinos) is just plain stupid.

Friends don’t let friends drive Frappaccinoed.

My hair has become disheveled, my eyes maniacal. I am no longer I-Am-Hip-And-Attractive-And-Just-Heading-A-Couple-Of-Exits-Down-To-Meet-My-Hunky-Boyfriend-For-Drinks-Girl. I am now Clearly-Insane-Talking-To-Herself-And-Couldn’t-Find-Anyone-To-Go-On-A-Roadtrip-With-Her-Girl.

Ah well.

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This post is a reworking of the one found here which I wrote years and years ago.  It fit the prompt so well that I decided to make this an exercise in editing.  What started out as 900-some-odd words is now a svelte 300.  I still like the original better, but for 300 words this one doesn’t suck.  If you read both this and the original, would you have edited it differently?

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25 Comments on “Red Writing Hood: The Solo Roadtrip”

  1. Kristina Says:

    This made me laugh out loud. Really funny, and really good. I want to read more.

    Reply

  2. TheKirCorner Says:

    THIS?? I loved. Just loved her. She’s a great character,..she’s funny and witty and slightly crazy and that makes her readable. 🙂

    really entertaining!!!!

    Reply

  3. susie Says:

    Ah God forsaken central California… I know her well and I know those brown (amber, gold, etc) hills well too. I thought this was really funny and I liked both pieces, but I did think the edited version was more stream lined and you didn’t lose any of the funniness from the original. Great job!

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  4. betsy Says:

    “hair pragmatically yet attractively clipped away from my face”… you phrased this so neatly… funny, cute, yet to the point.

    This was great! Loads of fun to read!

    Reply

  5. Amanda Says:

    HAHA! I always end up talking to myself on long car rides and people probably think I’m crazy…I just wish I had three fraps to blame it on

    Nice job!

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  6. Tina Says:

    Hilarious! Of course, after all that caffeine, it was probably time for a potty break.

    I liked your description of getting hyped up on those yummy drinks!

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    • Venus Says:

      Hahahaha, thanks! Amazingly, if memory serves, I didn’t stop at all on the way, and it was about a 5-hour drive. Maybe my bladder was also making me crazy. 🙂

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  7. Dawnie Says:

    This was great! And so relatable. I always try to look better when driving alone. I think I now know why! Haha.

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  8. lisapollard965 Says:

    This was too cute! I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!

    Lisa

    Reply

  9. Valerie Says:

    I love this! Your writing moves along at a nice energetic pace, and I feel like I’m right there with you and those three Frappuccinos!

    Reply

  10. mrsbear0309 Says:

    Haha. I can only imagine how many stops resulted from those Frappuccinos. Great descriptions, great job trimming the words.

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  11. angela Says:

    Hilarious! I, too, know the perils of overcaffeination (what? that’s not a word?) I generally find myself rearranging furniture when it happens, which can’t be done in a car, so I see the problem.

    Reply

  12. Cameron Says:

    Thank god I’m not the only one talking to herself in the car — and man I miss a solo roadtrip!

    Reply

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